Animatic Practice: War of the Worlds 'Like for Like' [FIXED]

Relevant Clip

Animatic spans approx. 0:40 - 01:12

[From Script to Screen] 'Like for Like' Storyboard: War of the Worlds

For my 'Like for Like' Storyboard I detailed an approx. 30 second sequence from the "Abduction" scene of 2005's War of the Worlds as directed by Steven Spielberg.

The majority of this storyboard had been drawn before I'd gained knowledge and advice on how little detail was actually required for this storyboard to serve its purpose so I was obliged to keep this detail level. However after having learnt a lot about the do's and don'ts of storyboarding over the past few days and seen several examples of successful storyboards from people I can interact with, means I now know the right way of doing it and will use this newfound knowledge for my own eventual storyboard.
[Larger Image]

In the video below the storyboarded events span between 0:39 and 1:11

[From Script to Screen] 'Like for Like' Storyboard Plan - War of the Worlds

There was never any doubt in my mind what film I'd be using for my 'Like for Like' Storyboard, that film being Stephen Spielberg's 2005 adaption of War of the Worlds, a film that has remained my favourite ever since I first saw it. 
Movie clip of scene: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_kopi8gT9KE

War of the Worlds – Like for Like Storyboard Plan

30 seconds: Duration through movie = 1:32:40 – 1:33:10

1:32:40 – Upside down car – zoom towards broken window.

:43-45 Rachel screaming

:44 Max zoom – see Ray’s head

:46 Ray turns head, looks out glass hole.

:47 Switch to view through small round glass hole, framing helpless Rachel in a ring of broken glass. Zooming in…

1:32:50 Max zoom – Rachel looking in father’s direction, right at camera.

:51 Cut to – behind Rachel – tripod in front of here, bright tripod light above her head – rather than safety, means danger, tripod moving towards her [Note Tripod leg positions]. Camera dollies backwards…

:55 Dollying continues… Rachel full body in shot – Tripod head above & in front of her, lights focus on her at the same time Tripod’s centre leg comes down behind, to the right – Rachel begins walking backwards.

:56-59 Dollying continues then completes before cut. Tripod continues to come towards Rachel then tilts head down to look at her, lights intensely focus on her – like an abduction beam.

1:33:00 Cut to shot through Tripod eye, Rachel standing on red weed covered ground looking up at tripod, encircled by the spotlight. Camera zooming in…

:02 Camera zoomed really close to Rachel, she fills frame centre.

:03 Cut to Ray running to the right, extreme motion blur of surroundings. Camera trucking to the right…

04: Cut to more distant view of tripod, Rachel and Ray tiny in comparison, Ray running from behind Tripod towards Rachel as Tripod tentacle reaches out towards her.

07-10: Rachel grabbed by tentacle, brought towards Tripod eye as the Tripod rises. 

(:09- Rachel screaming)